I need opinion on my story?

Question: I need opinion on my story!?

I finished only 2 chapters of my book called Into the!.!.!.!.

I need some feedback on it!. Its on my blog!.

http://profile!.myspace!.com/index!.cfm!?fus!.!.!.

P!.S!. I am only 13!. Yes i already know i have grammar problems!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Personal opinion!
Chapter 1!. As a reader, would like a bit of explanation as to why old woman suddenly believed the 'hero' was not a bad-un!.
She gets too fiendly too quickly with no reason or explanation!. Maybe a sentance or two to describe her change of mind!? Maybe go into a bit of detail, as I assume this is a chatty woman, considering she went into detail of the attackers clothes etc!.
Chapter 2!. Love the humour coming through here!. Was beginning to think there may be too much in the way of speech for a reader, but this chapter has dulled it down a bit, so the reader can begin to find a character to sympathise and empathise with!. Love it!
Chapter 3!. Don't stop writing! Spelling and grammer will sort themselves out!Www@QuestionHome@Com

For a 13 year old you have uniqueness!. Is a good start and I understand your grammar problem, no one is perfect and is only an example!. Keep writing more and as soon as you're done read it, rewrite some mistakes and voilá!Www@QuestionHome@Com

If you know there's grammar problems, why are you posting it on your blog without fixing your mistakes first!? - writeroffthelake at www!.writeroffthelake!.comWww@QuestionHome@Com

Ya it's pretty good keep working on it and if you get it published the publisher will help you but it's great so far good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wigdy what!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well it seems you've already answered this for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

okay!.!.!.why did you post the story if you know you have some mistakes!?
But anyways!.!.!.i think it was pretty cool!
:)Www@QuestionHome@Com