Question: GOOD IDEA 4 bOoK!?
OK SO i want to write a book and i have an idea
note: please dont leave nasty comments please say "i dont like it"
(the story is in 1st person)
hey, my name is kyle!. I have so many friends the number is like uncountable!. i know, not a word!.!.!. ok, so my only problem is my sister, Laura!. She is youinger than me and she always gets the benefit of the doubt!. All the grownups treat her like this sweetheart and treat me like im nothing!. Thats me, nothing!. Except my friends, they know Laura is an evil person!. Oh! by the way im 8 and shes only 4!. When my parents arent there she breaks my stuff and calls me names and stuff and i really dont like it! She needs to be exposed!!! But thats what me and my friends will do!. But it is not going to be easy!.!.!. like once, when she was three, i taped her drawing on my journal that i need for school guess what!? My mom got mad at ME for using HER video camera! This is getting out of hand!.!.!. Laura, you need to be EXPOSED
the name of the book is ExPoSEd!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
:D i think it would be a good idea!. i am into writing books my self (romance and tragedy) !. i really do think it is good!. but you should rearrange the scentences!.!.!. kinda like this!.
"Hey, my name is Kyle, 8 years old and considered to be nothing in my family!. I have so many friends that i cant even count , and unlike my family, they treat me like something!. I know, not a word!.!.!. ok, so my only problem is my sister, Laura!. She is younger than me, 4 years younger to be exact, and she always gets the benefit of the doubt!. All the grownups treat her like a sweetheart !. You should be thinking by now on why i would think my sister is a problem, well its because shes pure evil!. Pure evil that wants to sabotage my life, and the only other ones that believe me are my friends!. When my parents aren't there, she breaks my stuff, calls me names, and whatever else she and her grubby hands can do!. I cant stand it! She needs to be exposed!!! Thats why my friends and i are planing to do, exposing her!. It wont be easy, but i'm sure i will find a way to show my family what her true nature is, pure evil!.
Laura, I will expose you no matter what it takes!. "
maybe something like that!?!?!? But other than that it sounds like it has a good plot!!!
email me more plz!!! ( email= justactnaturalandyouwillbefine@yahoo!.com!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
So, how old are you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Alright, I won't leave behind a nasty comment!. I'll just say I didn't like it!.
The story sounds very childish--that's actually a pretty nice way to say it!. It's the only way I could think of saying it and I'm not trying to hurt your feelings!. But it is childish!. The second sentence and I didn't want to finish it because it said "like"!. No!. That's a big no-no!. It's not something you'd find a good story!.
It definitely should not be in the blurb on the back!. Plus there are grammatical issues!. And you capitalized one letter and didn't the other--it's very weird to read that way!. And it all seems random!.
Organize your story/idea and then repost it!. You should get some more info about the world of writing and then come back!.
Hope I didn't hurt your feelings!. Good luck either way!Www@QuestionHome@Com
u should go into some 8 year old diabolical plan that would unexpectedly backfire horribley in kyle's face!. then go into something like him trying to patch up what just backfired in his face!. then in doing so his friends turn on him!.
if u want a happy ending u can have them make up and be friends again and go back to busted laura
or for a more dramatic ending u can have it so that his friends dont come back to him and his "diabolical plan" gets his parents a divorce which eventually gets laura exposed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com