Good beginning to my story?

Question: Good beginning to my story!?

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omg this was sooo good!
i would totlaly read the rest of the book :)
one thing i noticed was in the beggining when u were reffering to the girl macan u spelled it macon and that confused me
so just double check that cuz it can get confusing bout their names being so similar
but anyways great plot
and u write wonderfully
i actually like kinda felt like her when i read it
one thing i was wondering was how old she might be
in the beggining i thought she was like 16ish
but then when u said shed been intimate with 5 before i got thnking that she was more late twenties!.!.!.
just make sure u make that clear, k!?
lol
anywas great work
and i hope ive helped =)

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fabulous!! it seems real and relatable!.!.!. keep up the good writing!!!
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