Prologue --- http://pyroluster!.deviantart!.com/art/Blu!.!.!.
Ch 1 --- http://pyroluster!.deviantart!.com/art/Blu!.!.!.
There's a lot more ch than that too! lolz
hope you like it! ^^
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I'm 13 Bwahahahaha! lolzWww@QuestionHome@Com
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Ch 1 --- http://pyroluster!.deviantart!.com/art/Blu!.!.!. There's a lot more ch than that too! lolz hope you like it! ^^ PS I'm 13 Bwahahahaha! lolzWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It was really really REALLY great! If you get it published, it would probably be like!.!.!.!.!.Twilight or Blue Bloods but better! It was so awesome!Www@QuestionHome@Com I'm not going to read those, but just so you know, posting fiction on a website that's directed at art is a bad idea, especially if you want some good feedback on it!. I highly suggest posting your writing up on a website like fictionpress!.com where you'll get some actual feedback in a place that's directed towards only writing!. You can even get a beta reader, someone who proofreads your work and gives you suggestions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com In the Prologue: "Something grabed me by my *throught* and lifted me off the ground!" Typo! Should be "throat" (you spelled it right later)!. And then "old man in his late forties"!?!? Yeah, that should actually be "middle-aged"!. Old is over sixty!. And then the last line: "*YOUR* ESCAPING ! ! ! " That should be "you're" because in it's un-shortened form it would be: "You are escaping!!!" And you + are = you're!. In Chapter 1: "From that day forward I swore on the scars the vampire left on my throat and on my family's and my own life that I wouldn't *every* let a vampire live that ever crossed my path!.!.!." The "y" whouldn't be there!. "I asked as she *cought* up with me" That's "caught"!. "I also wore a red *rebon* like a head band" That's "ribbon"!. "My *secreat* was almost exposed!.!.!." It's spelled "secret"!. Sorry if I seem really picky, but spelling is kind of important!. Now, I really like your writing style!. I couldn't stop reading when I started!. (I went back and re-read it for mistakes!.) The prologue was very suspenseful and exciting!. And it was very exciting to wait to find out what was after her!. I like the way you didn't tell us, only saying that SOMETHING was after her!. Now, if you don't mind, I'll go read the rest!. Very good story, by the way!. :D Keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com I loved it! I couldn't even finish chapter 1 if I wrote a book!. I may start writing a book today, but only for me!. Spelling mistakes, and please add more detail!. Like how Rinn's face looks!. Keep writing and send me links!!!! Please!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I really-really liked it! I'd like 2 read more; if u continue writing post a link or smthg 2 see it, OK!? Great job!. PS Correct the spelling stuff, it's a pity 2 let silly mistakes ruin the atmospere u r creating with ur book! Keep writing and good luck! ;-)Www@QuestionHome@Com That's sounds really great!. Good job :)Www@QuestionHome@Com It seems like a very well written book!. Keep up the good hard work!Www@QuestionHome@Com |