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Question: Is This A Good Summary For Being Written By An 11-Year-Old!?
The True Confessions of Charlotte Doyle is about a young girl who lives in Liverpool, England during the 1800’s!. Her parents and younger brother and sister, who are twins, moved back to America where they once lived before her younger siblings were born, while thirteen-year-old Charlotte Doyle stays behind until her school year finishes!. She is faced with new challenges along the way, but finally she gets to see her family again—after she goes on a treacherous voyage!.

After the school year is done, she is to board a ship called The Seahawk with two families!. The families were to act as her chaperones, but at the last minute, Charlotte is told that they are not able to make it on the voyage!. They cannot attend because of circumstances such as illnesses and deaths!. Now Charlotte is harshly and quite frequently advised by the crewmembers not to board the ship!. But young, determined Charlotte discards these advisories and the people that told her to do so, and she went along with the voyage!. There were many questions in her mind at that time “Why won’t anyone go on the ship!?” “Why are they so afraid of Captain Jaggery!?” To me, he seems like a nice, sensible gentleman!.”

During her deceitful voyage, Charlotte faces many challenges along the way!. Some of those challenges mentioned include finding changes with her personality and her shipmates!. She learns how to deal with witnessing several deaths and murders of her shipmates, who are her newfound friends!. She was even locked in the ship’s jail cell in the fore hold (the bottom storage area of the ship) because of her being falsely accused of murder of the first-mate, then re-befriending her thought-dead newfound friend Zachariah while down there!. In the end, Charlotte, Zachariah and the remaining ship hands helped to make the Seahawk a dignified, self-ruled ship by overthrowing their deceitful, cruel captain!.

I thought this book gave good descriptions, and was very well written!. I really enjoyed the ending when Charlotte found her desire!. Many people can have the same types of emotions stated in this book because it can be metaphorically related to common day challenges such as: peer pressure, guilt, adventures, the yearning to find one’s true self, or even facing one’s fears!. No person could read this book without feeling envy, pride, and enthusiasm for young Charlotte!. Even after reading this book ten times, you still get an adrenaline rush when there is an exciting part of the story, so most readers feel those rushes extremely frequently!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow!.!.!. that is really good for being only 11 years old!. How did you learn how to right like that!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Holy freakin' crap!! That's amazing for an eleven year old!. You should read some of the jargon people that claim themselves to be "aspiring writers" post on here and ask us to review!. =) It pales in comparison!.
Did you copy and paste this!? Are you eleven years old for real!? I'm sorry for having my doubts, but this seems too good to be true!.
Have a Star!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is way too good! Are you sure you're 11!? Wow, some people here ask us to review, and some are not half as good as this! Keep it up!Www@QuestionHome@Com

A+

:-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's great! I loved that book, too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

oh sweet jesus i can not read that!

but since i cant it means its fantasticWww@QuestionHome@Com

uhm!.!. if an 11-year-old wrote that!.!.!.!.yeah its gonna be great!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes it is very good! the only thing is the teacher might think you plagiarized that!. considering that every comma is correct and you used extremely big words for an 11-year-old-EC-metaphorically,adrenaline!.!.!. you might no what those words mean but the teacher may be suspicious just be carefulWww@QuestionHome@Com

Thanks for taking advice from the previous question; it's good to see someone actually take that sort of thing seriously!. Good job incorporating the theme and Charlotte's changes!. Your writing's easily on a tenth-grade level, judging from that!.

The only concerns I have:

Italicize or underline the book title (depending on format!.)

the 1800s - needs no apostrophe

'Her parents and younger brother and sister, who are twins, moved back to America where they once lived before her younger siblings were born' - the 'who' implies her parents AND her siblings, and the sentence is wordy!. Say 'Her parents and twin younger siblings moved back to America, where they lived before the twins were born!.'

"There were many questions in her mind at the time: "Why!.!.!.!?" etc!. - missing a colon!. (You probably should use the blockquote function in MS Word to separate this!.)

advisories - not the word you want to use here!. Use 'discards these warnings and the people that warned her!.'
'some of those challenges mentioned' - unneeded!. Use 'faces many challenges along the way, including changes in her personality and changes in her shipmates!.'
re-befriending is awkward!. Just say 'befriending again!.'

On a collegiate level, you don't use 'I' in formal papers, but I very much doubt that for!.!.!. fifth grade (!?) your teacher will care about that!. All in all, extremely good improvements, though--it's pleasant to see that there are still 11-year-olds that care about literate writing!

(Edit: Made a grammar fix of my own: Changes _in_ her personality!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

11 yr olds aren't supposed to post on here!.Www@QuestionHome@Com