Question: Am I a good writter!?
Every1 tells me Im a good writter and that I should b an author!. I am 12!. Wut do u think!?
"BOOM!BOOM!" My heartpounded loudly like a drum as I took another step further!. Should I go back!? SHould I stop here!? No!. I couldnt go back to those ugly, abusive people who call themselves family!. I kept running as fast as lightning and before I knew it I couldnt stop!. Faster and faster I went!. The faster I went the more tears came down, and before I knew it waterfalls were streaming down my cheaks!. My feet felt like they were about to fall off, but I couldnt stop!. It almost seemed as if god was waiting for me yelling "COME ON! ALMOST THERE!" He was telling me to finish the race, and I could feel it!. He would be there to hand me the gold medal once I finished this horindous race that is so unbearable and horrible!. This is the race of life!. It was as if no one could touch me till I crossed the finish line!. I had no clue why I was running and why I couldnt stop!. All I knew was I was running awaWww@QuestionHome@Com
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Very nice!. You've got the fundamentals of nice writing down pat, but your shaping, phrasing, and grammar could use a little spruce, though I'm sure your skills will mature and develop over time!. Overall, good job and keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's really good for an improvisation!
It could use some serious editing and a bit more planning, but it's really gripping!. I'm not sure that's the right word!. It captured my attention!. Is that synonymous!? Oh well!.
You also need to make sure you can develop a plotline though!.
Keep practicing and good luck! I really think you can do this!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i LOVE that! i only have two things 2 say!. 1!.)in the begining, you should have it say "THUMP!THUMP!"!. it would sound better!. 2!.) it's spelled ShakesPEARE not Shakesbeer LOL! either way great story!. keep it up and i'll be looking for books from you in the future!. that is if i knew what yer name was!. oh well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really liked it!. It's really good for a 14 teen year old and your 12 so yes its good!.
And as you get older like the other person said your writing will get better!. I think you have a pretty good chance of becoming a writer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Uh, sure I guess!. I'm twelve, and I don't really write stories!. But if I were to change anything, I would make the scene slower!. Put a bit more detail to reveal and events that are coming up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You need better diction!. I read the first few sentences and it was!.!.!.!. okay!. You have a good concept, but the acctual writting needs improvement!. But for a 12 year old, it is pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
that was awesome! I'm almost 12 and am considered a good writer! Just make sure you capitalize GodWww@QuestionHome@Com
you are really good
very descriptive
its really good for a 12 year old
(im 13 and people say im a good writer too)Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow!.!.!. thats goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
I am a writer and I don't want to sound harsh but you need to work on expanding your vocabulary and, yes, your spelling as well!. also, no offense, however running away from an abusive family is such an over used idea, come up with something no one has written about, be inspired!. All in all, though, its interesting to see that a 12 year old can "go places" with her writting when she cannot even spell!. Once again, sorry for the harsh words but you need to know if you are going to be an author, then its just you against the critics!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Eh!.!.!.I think you're overusing metaphors and ranting too much!. We get it!. She's running away and she feels adrenaline!. It gets old after a few sentences!.
also, it'd be better if you didn't just tell us about her abusive family in half a sentence!. You could also probably show, not tell, about her family!. When she comes out and tells you about her abusive family, it sounds like she's whining, like "Wah, look at me! My parents are abusive! See!"!. Most readers are sympathetic towards abuse, but not if it's told!.
Honestly, it sounds more like a children's novel, for the Judy Blume age range!. Not that it isn't hard to write a children's novel, but it can't be judged the same way as other writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com