Do you think this is a good plot for a short story?

Question: Do you think this is a good plot for a short story!?

For my GCSE coursework, i have to write a short story!.

My teacher has asked for us to prepare a brief draft, so here are my initial ideas!.

A boy, around 16, realises that he can kill living things simply by drawing them!. He is very unpopular, so of course he decides to take revenge on those who abused him!.

His school takes a trip to an art gallery (or somthing along those lines) and he sees the people he has killed in all the images!. In the news reports about their deaths on tv he sees the pictures of them mouthing his name!.

Later at home he is sitting in front of a mirror looking through his sketch book!. He looks up into the mirror and sees all his victims!. They begin talking to him, making him feel guilty but not threatening him etc!.

He begins to draw a picture- of himself!.

I figured i could start with something like:

'“The pen is mightier then the sword but a picture is worth a thousand words”

What do you think!?

RachWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

You have the best idea I've ever seen on here for a short story, for GSCE work!.!.!. for any work!.
*Now take it down and work on it privately!.
Sweet!.
ADD: ah, please don't let this be a snatch from another source, like anime, Deathnote!.
http://www!.manga!.com

2nd ADD: the Deathnote I read about, with Elizuka (a doubted spelling) sounds nothing like your idea, and I can't find my pw, so I couldn't watch it, just read a couple of reviews!. I will hope this is as original as it can be!.!.!. knowing very little is FULLY original in plot-making!.

3rd ADD: The book 'Gwin' tells of is 'The Picture of Dorian Gray' by Wilde!. Different than your idea!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ookkaayy!. that sounds alot like an anime called Deathnote!. it sounds a little weird with the whole seeing the faces of his victims thing!. but i liked the first half, the part where he finds out he can kill anyone just by drawing their picture!.!.!.!.wish i had that, there would be a few less people in my school!. lol!. jk!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it very much, a very interesting concept!. You could perhaps make him very good at drawing!. And, just to change things up a bit, you could say:
"Although some say that the sword actually is mightier than the pen, in reality, the picture drawn by the pen is worth a thousand lives!."Www@QuestionHome@Com

Creative!. Probably the only creative and original idea I've seen on this site!.

The classic what makes a murderer a murderer!. I think it would be perfect!. It could get the reader inside the mind of someone who feels so strongly about killing other people!. It can make the reader understand why some people feel that way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Looks excellent to me! It sounds a bit like one book I read once!.!.!. I can't remember what it's called, but it's about a guy who gets a portrait of himself, and every day the man in the portrait ages, even if he doesn't look any different!.
I'd say write it! Sounds really good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty sad ;0!. That defenitly will get at least an A-!. E-mail me the story when you're done!
Keep on Writin',
BookloverasawormisthisQ&AWww@QuestionHome@Com

nice!! but a word of advise!.

their could b people who r real low lifes on yahoo answers who might want 2 use ur ideas so it may be best NOT 2 put up ur story ideas!.

Any ways theres got to be more power 2 da pen!?!? dont u think!?!? and theres got 2 b more to that then suicide!. there is right!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

It reminds me too much of Duma Key the latest by Sephen King except his artist had one arm and painted his deadly pictures with a phantom limb!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Intriguing!. Slightly depressing but good nonetheless!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's cool especially when he starts drawing himself!. Do that!Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!.!.yeah im totally creeped alreadyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds good!
-Claire ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

sounds good/Www@QuestionHome@Com

That would be the best ending, having him draw his own picture!.
But does he need to be unpopular!? He could just be aching to get even with a girl who snubbed him!. So he does the witchcraft thing of making an image of her to stick pins into!. But before he gets around to sticking pins in her picture, he gets a phone call from a friend, telling him Carlina died suddenly and unexpectedly!. Soon he starts doing this to other people he resents!.
When he kills the girl he loves with all his heart, because she had a spat with him, he only wants to die!.
But I would definitely not start with an old saying, however true!. It would give away the story!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a very interesting plot, and I think if executed correctly, it could be a great short story!.

The opening line, however, isn't doing it for me!. It's too broad, too well-known, and it doesn't make a whole lot of sense!. It doesn't hook the reader, either!. Maybe start out something with the main character, something that makes him unique, an observation or a moment when he's being bullied, something like that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com