What do you think of my stage crew application?

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Question:

It's for my middle school play!. It's due tomorrow! Ah! Any ideas on how to make it better, grammar mistakes, or anything at all please tell me! Thanks!

My name is Sady (insert my last name here) and I am in 8th grade!. I would like to be considered for a position on the “The Nifty Fifties” stage crew!. I feel it would be a great experience for me and I would be an excellent addition to this years play!.
I would be a helpful and dedicated member to the backstage crew!. I am very hard working and determined in anything I do!. I am ready and willing to come to every rehearsal and every Saturday you need any work done!. I can easily take charge or follow directions!. I can do a lot in a little time and am always prepared!. I’m responsible and always do my best!. I wan to help make this years school play the best it can be!.
When I saw last years play I knew I wanted to help with the next one!. My friends who did last years play told me what kind of experience they had!. They said they made so many new friends; it was the best time they’d had all of middle school!. I want to have the same experiences!. I’ve always loved going to plays and I really want to help make one!
I am very excited to see how this year’s play will turn out and I know it will be just as amazing as last years! I want to know what it’s like to work backstage in a play as I have never done it before!. I would be a dedicated and hard-working member of the stage crew!. I want to help make this play the best it can be and I think this is the way I can contribute!. Please make me a member of stage crew and you won’t be disappointed!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Instead of saying this : " I’ve always loved going to plays and I really want to help make one!"

I recommend saying something along the lines of, " I've always loved going to plays and I am eager to learn and be a part of the process of bringing a production to life on stage!."

Other than that your letter seems very genuine and you sound very eager and excited about an opportunity that you are willing to give your all to!.

Good Luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

My name is Sady (insert my last name here) and I am in 8th grade!. I would like to be considered for a position on the “The Nifty Fifties” stage crew!. I feel it would be a great experience for me and I would be an excellent actress to this year's play!.
I would be a helpful and dedicated member to the backstage crew!. I am very hard working and determined in anything I do!. I am willing to come to every rehearsal and every Saturday if you need any extra assistance!. I can easily take charge or follow directions!. I can do a lot in a short period of time and I am always prepared!. I’m responsible and always do my best!. I want to help make this year's school play the best it can be!.
When I saw last year's play, I knew I wanted to help with the next one!. My friends who did last year's play told me what kind of experience they had!. They said they made so many new friends; It was the best time they’d had all of middle school!. I want to have the same experience!. I’ve always loved going to plays and I really want to make one!
I am very excited to see how this year’s play will turn out and I know it will be just as amazing as last year's! I want to know what it’s like to work backstage in a play as I have never done it before!. I would be a dedicated and hard-working member of the stage crew!. I want to help make this play the best it can be and I think this is the way I can contribute!. Please make me a member of stage crew and you won’t be disappointed!

Here are some changes listed in the paragraph!. You have done an excellent job! Keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com