Ten points for best opinion on a song I wrote!?

Question: Ten points for best opinion on a song I wrote!!?

I'd like a detailed critique on a song I wrote with my band!.
It doesn't have to be good for me to choose it as the best answer!.
It's controversial so be warned!.
Thanks all for listening!!
Here for the song > http://www!.projectvitality!.co!.nr

Here for the band site (you know, if you want to check us out further :-) > http://www!.myspace!.com/vitalitydecree
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

your songs are pretty cool and my favorite is broken down (nice overlapping of vocals)

i'm not an expert but people like catchy-ness

the lyrics are awesome though :]

i like listening to the guitar and bongos (or watever you guys used)

good luck on your musical career!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry I could not listen because my stuff is lame!. I would love to know the lyrics though!. Never assume everyones stuff is up to date and can fly at will!. Perhaps you could post them on your next question!. Good luck to you sir!. Reminds me of a theme for a hit song:
My pc is lame
my life ain't tame
I think I am insane
My woman wants my body
my pc wants my brain
Chorus:
Woman
Clean my cookies
flush my brain
wash my hard drive
until I'm tame!.
My connection is dry
makes my woman mean
gonna work at walmart
my bodys' that clean!.
chorus
Gonna get my check
gonna get my life upgraded
gonna toss my pc
Before my love life's faded'
chorus

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Really great song!! It really "stirs" emotion and the melody with used instruments really work great together to create emotion!. I'm also no expert though!.
The only thing bothering was the "too deep" "Give me life" after the chorus!. For me it broke it a little, and the vocals need a bit of work, but further it's a really great song!

Good luck with your career!Www@QuestionHome@Com

YO! I like that song a lot however i think that if u did a little bit more with the vocals, sped up the tempo and did a put a little bit excitement to then it could b a whole lot better! ~!PEACE OUT!~Www@QuestionHome@Com