How are my monologues? Any suggestions?

Question: How are my monologues!? Any suggestions!?

Hey :)
I'm trying to work on some new monologues!.
If you can!. could you watch some and comment, tell me what ones your favorite!. what needs work!. Thanks!

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U ARE REALLY GOOD! My favorite one was the Abounded Monologue!. I almost cried!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I watched abandoned thinking it would be either tear worthy or bad and unfortunately it was neither!. You didn't catch my attention in the beginning which i can't blame on the distracting background because you should be able to work against that!. i can tell you have potential and the want to do well but you definitely don't know how!. i didn't see a character unleashing any emotion i saw an actress doing just one thing for two minutes!. you can't just say the lines like they should be said you have to believe them become them have a back story the works!. you must become the character not just portray them which i know some people can't even do but i believe in you! And don't perform unless you absolutely feel it (and know your lines!.!.!. unless those were supposed to be dramatic pauses which were totally lost on me!.) I think in this monologue in particular you didn't know what she actually felt you just knew what she said!. better luck next time, i know you can improve :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry Rachel, but they are not good!. Your focus is poor, they are not from published plays and all monologues should be, you do not slate, so they do not start well!. get someone else to operate the camera!. on the positive side, the lighting and background is better on the later ones, even though we see you are in a tight corner of your room and it seems restricting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com