How did i do on my new monologues? Suggestions? (Video included)?

Question: How did i do on my new monologues!? Suggestions!? (Video included)!?

Heey :)
I've taken everyones suggestions and put them into use!.
I moved to a better area!. got more emotion and feeling into it and more in the words and moved around a bit more!. Thanks everyone!
Heres are 2 (soon 3) new monologues!.

Comment, enjoy!
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http://www!.youtube!.com/watch!?v=tPn9egCI7!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think it was overall good!. The monologue just wasn't great, it sounded like monologues I have heard before!. I am not saying you are a bad actress, but I would suggest a better monologue!. I would like to see a monologue that clings in from the start, that has a dramatic effect since it starts!. I think you are a good actress, but if you went on an audition, I don't think the casting director would enjoy it!. Monologues can break or make people!. This is from another actor's perspective!. also, if you haven't been getting acting training, I would get it!. I am not saying you are bad, but every actor has something to improve!. Good Luck, and hope to see you in hollywood!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was acctually really good! Do you have any plans for your future!?Www@QuestionHome@Com