Is this good????

Question:Ok so I asked for ideas but only one person answered so I came up with my own monologue idea. Ok this is obviously not a monologue but an idea

Im gonna be a successful business woman who just got off the worst date ever.

Im gonna start it but saying bye (to this guy) and just getting out of "his car" then walking into my my house and tell my mom about this worst date ever starting off with "Oh my god that was the worst date ever, then going on the explain events that happened on the date.

IS that good???
My first acting class its for a midterm (college) so i have no idea what to do. Plz give me feedback.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Ok so I asked for ideas but only one person answered so I came up with my own monologue idea. Ok this is obviously not a monologue but an idea

Im gonna be a successful business woman who just got off the worst date ever.

Im gonna start it but saying bye (to this guy) and just getting out of "his car" then walking into my my house and tell my mom about this worst date ever starting off with "Oh my god that was the worst date ever, then going on the explain events that happened on the date.

IS that good???
My first acting class its for a midterm (college) so i have no idea what to do. Plz give me feedback.

no offense, but if you are a successful business woman, would you be still iving at home with you mom? You either need to make a comment about why she is there to clean up the confusion on that. The rest sounds pretty good. It should be able to make it 1-2 mins. I've had to do a few of those short monologues myself.

Omg That Is So Excellent!!!!! I Think You Are A Star LOL

yes

wow! I think that is a very creative idea and also I think your mom might be a bit angry but if this boy is rude that is a very good plan.

Remember to show your audience; not tell. You can build whole movie sets in people imaginations if you do it right.

That sounds really interesting! But rather than telling your mom about the date, how about a roommate? Also it might be helpful if you give her an age and a little background story, even if you don't tell your audience. This way she'll seem more real and it would probably make it easier to develop character traits, that you could incorporate into your piece!