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Question: Poem, any comments are appreciated!!?
My Mission

I'm not psychotic, I'm not going mad
I'm simply searching for what I once had
I don't need your help, or your guidance
I'm not sick in the head, so don't even try it

I just need love, why don't you understand it
I'm not a forceful person, so no, I won't demand it
Therapy won't help, there's nothing you can do
It's a part of life, and yes, I'll make it through

I sacrificed my chance for a much better cause
To provide the time needed, to correct all of my flaws
I'm not like most guys, my goal is not, to get you in bed
I'd much rather get to know you, and what's going on in your head

You're not like most girls, you're not predictable or easy
I don't even care if you think what I write is cheesy
I like a challenge, and to me, that's what you are
Which is why you're worth, every bit of my lonely heart

You're far away so I can't just send you some letter
And hope that you feel the same, and that you'll make my life better
It's more complicated, and the story goes deeper
It's not that I blew my first chance and now I'm trying to keep her

But instead, I'm simply trying to do everything right
I don't think she'll love me for a poem, it's too blind of a sight
But I hope these poems will guide her, so she knows how I feel
I'm not trying to get with her, these feelings are real

It'll take lots of time, I'm sure, and I have no doubt
But I would like to think that the point of it all, isn't left out
The point is that I love you, and I'd like you to know
But I never told you, before I had to go

But soon I'll be back, and I'll try it again
I don't have an issue with calling you my friend

But getting the message across is my mission!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is so sweet! No joke! If I got a poem like that from a guy, say on Valentine's Day, I would be so happy! It shows you're deep, not to mention different than most guys (which you've stated)!. Whoever this is directed to is a very lucky gal!.!.!.and hey if she doesn't like it, I'm totally available Mr!. Casanova =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

yes it is very good I like the rhyming and the details I like how it tells a story in a way!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I personally like this poem!. I wish someone wrote that for me!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

DUDE!! that poem rocked!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com