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Question: Please give me feedback on my very short poem!?
mouth moves
but it's hard
to hear!.

A sudden
broken sound

I won't
tell her
it was only
my heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's lovely as it is!.
Any padding would spoil it!.
It's great,leave it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

actually it is not bad!. your use of line breaks and structure is neato!. subject and epiphany elements are a little tired!. it's been done to death, but everyone has to write out all the tired old theme for themselves and then and only then you can start to write what your really need to write!. just keep writing - everyone's first 500 poems are usually crap, mine wereWww@QuestionHome@Com

i really like your poem, its really good free verse!.!.!.also u gave me the idea to post some of my poetry on y/a and get some ideas on how good it actually is - thanx!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it would be better without the first verse!. The first verse has to do with you and does not add to the meaning of the following verses!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is such a cute poem!. You did a really good job!. I give it a 10!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

make it longer dude, your the man haha!.!. that's great!.!. post it here again after finishing it!.!. ^^

i know there is more to it LOLWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's so sad!. I love it!. Saying what you feel, but not really saying it!.!.!. you know!.!.!.!.very creative!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well done!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Aww that's cute!. Is it for your girlfriend!.!. If you have one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awh! that was so sweet! if i were that girl i would blush* lol it was very cute sounds like your really digging her!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

quite ok!.!.

add more detail ad poetic devicesWww@QuestionHome@Com