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Going Down (An Etheree)
by Sydney

A vision of a Poet’s Hell

so dark
a black hole
is drawing me
into its huge maw
pulling my sore body
causing me eternal pain
in cold dark seventh ring of Hell!.
I scream mindless, writhing agony
abandoned here without a pen to write!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That's awesome!. I love poems with shapes!. And that would be a hell needing to write and having no pen!. To express with no outlet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

have been
in that hole
a few weeks now
but I have my pen
I have my paper too!.
The gravity is too strong
for words to make it out to you!.
So here I sit in my own nightmare
I can't even sit in my own old rocking chair!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

LOL!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.at the last line, due to the dramatic introduction!.
Although, I can relate, as well to without a mix of other items that need each other to make a whole!. Very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Excellent!. It doesn't seem like you, but it does describe very well the frustration writers feel when they have everything but inspiration!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Writers block!? Interesting form, the Etheree!. It requires discipline!. This seems a good one to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have been inspired!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I enjoy reading these!. Nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A fine example you are!. Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow! I learned something new today!. This is awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What a vision you paint! I bow in respect!Www@QuestionHome@Com