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Question: I want some criticism! Please let me know what you think of my poem!?
Please let me know what you think! I am a 16 year old guy btw:)

The sunset can only be as beautiful as the sunrise!.
You can only see if you open your eyes!.
Half the world is blinded by fear!.
The other, the thought of death coming near!.
Take a step back and observe all around!.
Don't continue to mope and stare at the ground!.
Hold your head high, and be proud!.
Don't just blend in, and walk with the crowd!.

If you liked this, check out my other poems and e-mail me what you think!. And get your friends to comment too, I'm always looking to improve:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Meh luffs it!. Meh luffs yew!

Yeah that's right people I am the #1 fan and shall be mentioned when he is famous!. (just kidding)

No I'm not tryna be stalkerish!. I'm just really bored!. You should like message me again though!. Dude!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it! It has nice meaning and imagery!. But work on the rhythm a little!. Make sure the number of syllables for each rhyme match!. Example:

(sorry this is a random example)

She walked down the street
Her shoes slapping against the hard concrete!.

I like to dance
in tight, shiny pantsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Awesome,really good work!.!.!.I'm so into poems like that!.!.I'm sorry I don't know how to criticize !.!.!.hehe!.!.well keep up the good work, I'm gonna post mine later so don't forget to tell me what you think! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com