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Question: Do you like this poem!? How would you change it!?
It is about a girl who kills herself, but no one knows why, because she seemed happy!.

Please don't be mean, I'm young and kind of inexperienced!. also, this is my first poem telling a story about some one else!.

Every since that blurry day
When tragedy struck her life
She never got back off the ground
And the fear stayed in her eyes

Her body is covered in deep scars
The worse from when she gave in
She put her last words in a note
and committed the ultimate sin

She now sleeps in a wooden box
Wearing a dress with white lace
No one knows why she took the easy way out
Because she always had a smile on her faceWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That was brilliant
i loved the beginning and the middle of how it was so sad then
the end gave it strength
i love this poem
really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its good, but I would change the last line!.!.kind of throws the whole poem offWww@QuestionHome@Com