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Question: I want to start writing poetry this is my second poem!.can you tell me if its any good please!.thank you!.!?
My feelings are dark
rarely light
i go for drives through the night!.

I think,
I wonder!.
whats going to happen,
i ask questions
never an answer!.

After death,
does that matter!.
why waste time,
live for now something tells me,
is that an answer!?

It gets to me,
but i dont want it to!.
Go away, i ask
Go away, i demand
praying with my hands!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Please,get rid of the diminutive i's!.!. You have creative ability yes!.
You need to work on grammar, punctuation and capitalization
I am not very good at this critiquing thing, I can see potential so keep writing!.
I will star this and see if any one wants to try to do better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You're idea here is good, but it would sound better if you took out some words here and there, for example:
the second stanza would be better if:
I think
whats going to happen
asking questions
without an answer
Good luck with your writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com