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Question: Hows my 3rd poem!? Please at least read!!?
Maybe im funny
Maybe im kind
Maybe im mean, but i dont mind
Maybe im neat
Maybe im boring
Maybe im small, even petite
Maybe im famous
Maybe im not
Maybe what i have now is all ive got
Maybe ill make lots more friends
Maybe ill lose on everyday until then end
Maybe my siblings will be taller than me
Maybe ill be as tall as a tree
Maybe ill marry
Maybe i wont
Maybe ill never know the answers to any of these
Maybe my life will change constantly
Maybe ill die tomorrow or tonight
Maybe ill get into a massive fight
Maybe ill get sick or have a little cold
Maybe ill sing, that never gets old
Maybe ill smile as big as the sun
Maybe ill have lots of fun
Maybe ill do something totally insane
Maybe im humble
Maybe im vain
Maybe ill have my first kiss in the rain
Maybe ill cry until my eyes are finally dry
Maybe ill get hurt again and again
Maybe ill wait and count to ten
Maybe ill fall in love, too soon to tell
Maybe it will happen at a random hotel
Maybe my mood swings will finally stop
Maybe when i grow up ill be a cop
Maybe i just wrote my whole soul
Maybe i just threw it out the window
Maybe this was worth it, i dont know
maybe i will tomorrow
Maybe im just that girl you see on the streets
Maybe im that girl whos completely unique
But one thing thats certain is im trying to find a place
But its hard cuz it seems likes its a race and all my friends are starting with a fast pace!.
Maybe im going too slow
Maybe im going so fast i missed the past
Maybe i went and took a wrong turn
But i probably just had to learn
Life is hard but the hardest part is growing upWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You have a lot of great lines in this poem, and I like the fact that it's not completely angst driven!. It's unique and quirky!. One bit of advice, though--do a little editing!. You should cull out the weaker lines, so the stronger ones are more dominant!. Don't worry about shortening it a little, just keep the parts that are most important to you!. also, toward the end, the poem looses a bit of it's cadence, so you may want to take a look at the ending!. I think this has the makings of a really good poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is such a good poem!.!.!.I really like it!.!.!.!.
Try Http://Www!.poetry!.com
They have free poetry contests, and they've published me before!.
I wouldn't change it in any way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Loooooved it :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

its soooooo good but it does have some rough patches!.!.!.

i'd give it a 7 or 8!.Www@QuestionHome@Com