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Question: New poetry, looking for any opinions! 10 or more answers is my goal! (:!?
Stone Walls

Water is piercing, through these stone walls
It's breaking the dam, that I hoped wouldn't fall
It's flowing like rage, through the streets of the town
It's spreading like a disease going around and around

This water that I speak of, is the words from my soul
It's breaking free from my mouth, and supporting my goal
I was called to deliver what you were meant to receive
But I returned it to sender, because of fear within me

I was beaten and bruised and carved into a man
I was spit out, kicked down and created into who I now am
Through suffering and pain I was given a foundation
If I tried to rebel, I would cause confrontation

I had to go with it and just face every day
No matter how much I tried I couldn't wish my past away
So here I am walking with my head held high
I am just another person who's trying to get by

I've been put down, and told to let go
But in life that's not what hurts the most
Living every day knowing I left you behind
Hurts me the most, both my heart and my mind

These thoughts won't let me sleep, I am always awake
Except for in nightmares where I'm asleep but I shake
Not cause I'm cold or because I don't have a blanket
But because I know the truth and I just can't take it

It torments my dreams and rips at my heart
I'm now at the end, wishing to go back to the start
I wish I could change every second of my past
Not the sarcasm and let downs, for they didn't last

But the part where I left you and thought
That I made the right decision!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Great!. Most times on here you find poems that seem elementary but yours was well-written!. I given up on writing poetry and moved onto writing a manuscript but that doesn't mean I can't appreciate a good poem when I see one!. Keep it up!. There is one criticism I have for you though!. Not sure if you want to hear it, I'll check back a lil later to see!.

Edit- Wow just read your profile and the fact that you have a book under your belt at the age of 17 is impressive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm speechless, That's like WoW , keep it up! I really enjoyed it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is a good poem so what inspires your ideas these are really good !!Www@QuestionHome@Com