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Position:Home>Poetry> Would someone give a little feed back on some of my poetry? I need some honesty!Question: Would someone give a little feed back on some of my poetry!? I need some honesty! thanks!!? Shadows past echo love waiting!.
Never touched; forbidden, aching Smiles not seen; distance breaking Oceans of days wasted, not taking Laughter unheard; seasons changing Beaches not walked; footprints fading Spirits entwined!. True love still waiting!. Forever will be And friendship is all we’re takingWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Fabulous! It is amaaaazing, keep it up! When I read it, I can relate very strongly, and feel lots of emotion!. Nice job :DWww@QuestionHome@Com The last four lines break away from what your overall pattern was, I would put them together and revise the last line Example: Shadows past echo love waiting!. Never touched; forbidden, aching Smiles not seen; distance breaking Oceans of days wasted, not taking Laughter unheard; seasons changing Beaches not walked; footprints fading Spirits entwined; true love still waiting Forever will be, friendship is takenWww@QuestionHome@Com Being a Poet myself I have 2 say I think its good!. True poetry it the emotions and creativity of the poet!. Visit www!.allpoetry!.com and get some good feed back as well as publish your work!. Good Luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com not too bad actuallyWww@QuestionHome@Com wow!. ur good!Www@QuestionHome@Com |