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Question: A weather 'poem', sort of!. What do you think!? Critiques welcome!.!?
The sun is coming up
shades of red and orange
clear sky delights
which means it is
'cold as a witches tit!'
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Beautiful!.
Not quite over the trees yet,
the moon is hanging full
afraid it won't be heard!.
Snow is undisturbed
a blanket for the grass,
Earth is quiet now,
people stay in from cold!.
Barren trees stand tall
Applauding rising sun
drinking in the warmth
in the coldness of it all!.
Listen to the quiet cries
of earth beneath your feet
calling ever so softly;
the screaming hurts your ears!.
Breath deeply
drinking in the cold!.
After spring
Summer comes
and hot is what you'll feel!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this painted a picture in my mind,beautiful!.
all i can say is i m honored to be one of your many fans!.
i like it, this is something different from your usual giggling self!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i actually reeeeally enjoyed it, it sticks to the meter, and almost seems to give out a scent - very enjoyable
nice work! :D
keep penning :D :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
You have painted a pretty picture of my least favorite season!. I applaud the sun whenever I see it these days!.
just a suggestion, try not to use the to-be verbs
the moon is hanging full
moon hanging fullWww@QuestionHome@Com
Thems the words of truism!.
A pleasant read and a pleasant reminder!. I was just whining about this damn cold!. Thanks for setting me straight!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A serious piece from giggles!? How lovely!. Now, put this away for a month or two and then revisit it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
love it keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!
send me more poems on my mail please!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I enjoyed this !.!.!.!.!.Nicely doneWww@QuestionHome@Com
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thanksWww@QuestionHome@Com