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Question: What do you think of my poem!? any suggestions or advice!? 10 points to best answer!!!!!?
By : Me

Living the moments
Losing the lies
Trying to find my way deep inside

My body so strong
My mind so old
Trying to see my destiny unfold

In times of troubles
In moments of smiles
Will I be ready to run the extra miles!?

My eyes shutting closed
A second to choose
Can I shake off the feeling I'll lose!?

I think I can do this
I mean!.!.!.I know that I can
I can let my mind soar
I won't let myself hide anymore

My name I can not recall!.
My face has me enthralled!
But I know myself too well
This is my reflection!.!.!.
This is my perfection!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
there are a lot of poems up today but i think your one was BEST mainly because i could understand it and is correctly titledWww@QuestionHome@Com

its good, although he rhyme scheme takes away from the intensity!. I like how it shows change, but maybe consider adding a catch phrase at the end which brakes the formation and yet brings it all together!. what is it that you are tryitng to get so badly!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Intense!. It's kinda like a song!. Ever heard of Last Resort!? If you haven't, go to Youtube and listen to it then sing the same kind of tempo the singer does!. It sounds really good!

Kick ***/ 10Www@QuestionHome@Com