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Another poem! please read an critique ! thanks!?
I never thought
That I would be
The pretty girl
Inside your dreams
But then one day
You come to me
Comfort to me
My heart begins
To open up
A light shines through
I see close up
The magic in
Your warm brown eyes
My view as changed
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is pretty nice!
At first I thought you were talking about wanted to be with a "popular" dude, but at the end "On humble guys" really confused me though!.
But I love that you used an eye color besides BLUE! Gah! Everyone seems to think that people are only beautiful with blue eyes!
yeah that was good! i liked it! =]]
I write poetry too!
check out my site!.!.!.some of them are really bad though!.!.!.
Wonderful! You have a nice way of expressing yourself!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's good!.!.!.very straightforward, but good
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I Like it i think its very cute :PWww@QuestionHome@Com