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Question: Is this poem good!? I've neva been a real poet!.!.!.just wanted too!.!.!.!?
I walk in the room and flashing lights all around!.
So much commotion, so much sound!.
Everything going on around me, but I'll I see is you!.
Standing in the crowd, You look just about through,
You turn and see me, in my gown, you don't know who I am
My mask hides me, but you see me around town!.
We know we've found love with the friction between shortening!.
You grab me tight to you and swirl me around!.
We dance the night away and I never heard any other sound!.
You know we cant be, and so do I,
So for our last gaze,we kiss good-bye!.!.!.!.!.!.

Is it good!? Please give HONEST opinions but not any rude ones!.!.!.!.!.Any suggestions 4 it 2 change!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
As not being a real poet, if u have written n tried this much then its an APRECIABLE EFFORT of yours!.!.
Try 2 write in much more better use of vocabulary n try to be little fluent so that reader should get much more interested about the poem!.
I know you can do it n you will surely do it!.!.!!
All the best 4 up coming poems of yours!.!.!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Improve your scansion and either break up some lines to make more than one, or simply shorten them!. It's alright, but it could be better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com