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Question: A new poem that I wrote!. W!hat do you think!? Please comment:) Thank you!?
I just wrote this today and just wanted to know what you thought of it!. Im 16 btw!.

If you're going to turn!.
Turn into something good!.
If you're going to break!.
Break a bad habit!.
If you're going to thrive!.
Thrive for success!.
If you're going to hold a grudge!.
Hold it on the devil!.
If you're going to be mean!.
Mean to help someone!.
If you're going to bleed!.
Bleed out the bad memories!.
If you're going to fight!.
Fight through tough times!.
If you're going to cry!.
Cry tears of joy!.
If you're going to lie!.
Lie in the arms of the one you love!.
If you're going to fall!.
Fall in love!.
If you're going to love!.
Love someone who will love you back!.
If you're going to die!.
Die with no regrets!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I absolutely love it and so does my friend!.
I am asking you permission to put this poem in a book me and her are writing!. A book of poetry!. Please respond!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I enjoy how it teaches the reader something!.

Its good! :D
The only line I didn't like was ,
If you're going to bleed!.
Bleed out the bad memories''

It's like your telling someone to cut themselves!.!.!. :(

Other than that!.!.!.its great!Www@QuestionHome@Com

awesome poem! it doesnt rhyme, but thats whats so cool about some poems, they dont need to rhyme!. i think it flowed really nice, and what ur saying is true and inspirational :P keep it up :PWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it because it teaches you something!.
the more i think about it, the more i like it :)

great job

STARS FOR YOU :D *yeah*Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good job! 10/10Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's greatWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it too!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i love it, it is really!.!.!. i don't know but its really sweet and deep!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i loveee it!
its really good!
and hey do u think that u could answer my question!?
its under poetry and i need help writing my ode poem!