I am 14 and would like to know if you like the first variation, the second variation, or neither!.
Suggestions to make it better will be much appreciated!
1!.
Oh how I miss those warm summer days,
When all the world is so off pace,
Lazy days go by and by,
While the sun hangs lowly in the sky,
Heat beats down upon my head,
As if a spell cast down on me,
I lay down slowly on the luscious green,
As a gentle breeze puts me at ease,
Flowers brush against my face,
The sweet aroma putting me to sleep,
I close my heavy eye-lids like a shield from the sun,
And doze off into enchantment,
As if a timeless dream,
Bees buzzing and lawn mowers humming,
Fresh cut grass and barefooted children,
Butterflies fluttering and tree leaves dancing,
All seem to paint the image of summer days and sounds into my mind
2!.Why is that I miss those warm sunny days!?
When all the world is so off pace,
And lazy days go by and by,
While the sun hangs lowly in the sky,
I lay down slowly on the luscious green,
As the hot sun casts a spell upon me,
Its texture cool and crisp,
Like a freshly turned pillow beneath my head,
As a gentle breeze puts me at ease,
All the days troubles swiftly drift away,
Wild Flowers brush against my face,
With colors so full and fresh,
As if falling from an artist’s canvas,
The sweet aroma putting me to sleep,
Almost like in a timeless dream,
Bees buzzing and lawn mowers humming,
Fresh cut grass and barefooted children,
Butterflies fluttering and tree leaves dancing,
All tell me to lay down and stay,
And just to enjoy this warm summer daze,
Stay and lay,
For just a little bit longer…!.
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