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Question: What, my friends, do you think of this poem!? Help me make it better please!!!!?
The Iron Curtain

Your fearless smile speaks volumes of bravery and
Your sprightly laugh breathes love into hatred!.
Your sunshine curls sail adrift on bliss while
Your fortress hands protect the weak!.
Your starlight skin lights me up!.

But behind the stormy sky of your eyes
Stands an Iron Curtain!.

Hidden in the quiet recesses
Of your fragmented mind
Your ransomed secrets
Beg for release,
Once lovers, now fighters,
They scream for recognition!.

I wage war
On the arsenal of unspoken words
Mounting against us!.
Help me fight
Before we lose
The battle against
The unseen enemy,Www@QuestionHome@Com

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