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Question: Rate my poem THANK YOU VERY MUCH!!?
ts my first attempt at writing a poem!.!.
i just had an urge, it is my first draft and not yet finished
(my mother tongue is not english!)
please comment and rate it and give me your opinion and criticism ;-)
thakn you for your time and opinion

worry is the dagger at my throat
doubt the sword that pierces my heart
I die a thousand deaths a day
the anguish of the soul that tears me apart

Mea culpa, mea culpa, mea maxima culpa

fleeing the shadows
I myself created
slain by the the devil
I myself conceived
trapped in my own reflection
captured in a lie that i believed

I am a king imprisoned in the
dark cell of my own being
I am the prisoner and the guard
holding the key to freedom in my heart

In every person I am meeting myself
I despised and hated my fellow brother
but as I removed his mask, to my great surprise
He was actually me in a different disguise

The hell that every man carries within himself
is projected onto the world
a mirror image of their fears and inner screams
We attract what we harbour in our soul
our loftiest fantasies, our darkest dreams

I am the seed
the world is the harvest
bringing forth fruits
of my every deed
beautiful or ugly, bitter or sweet

I am the author, and life is my play
thoughts my ink, my soul my pages
in the book of eternal life
my every word comes to pass
and my world is but a looking-glass

Dream, dream!.!.!.Dream without end!
Dream great dreams for they
are the promise of what is to come
as you dream so shall you become!

I AM master of my life
I am the molder and shaper
the maker and creatorWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
with English not being your main language + first attempt to add to it!.!.!. 10/10!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i enjoyed it very much, i would say mm!.!.!.9/10
excellent first time :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is a very good poem please tell me how you could write such a wonderful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


It's deep!.

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