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Oh how I miss those warm summer days,
When all the world is so off pace,
Lazy days go by and by,
While the sun hangs lowly in the sky,

Heat beats down upon my head,
As if a spell cast down on me,
I lay down slowly on the luscious green,
As a gentle breeze puts me at ease,

Flowers brush against my face,
The sweet aroma putting me to sleep,
I close my heavy eye-lids like a shield from the sun,
And doze off into enchantment,
As if a timeless dream,

Bees buzzing and lawn mowers humming,
Fresh cut grass and barefooted children,
Butterflies fluttering and tree leaves dancing,
All seem to paint the image of summer days and sounds into my mind!.

I am 14!. thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'm a little impressed, just because I don't know a lot of 14 year olds who write anymore!. :)
Here's what I recommend - read it over!. If it's an image that you have read repeatedly in other places, consider replacing it!. I think that'll be the first step to giving it a unique touch!.
Best of luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

14, like wow!.

I started writing poems when I was 15 last year!.

This one is good!.
It makes me feel bored and kinda sleepy because of the hotness of the day!.!.!.I mean in this poem!.

If you wanna make something that everyone would love, try writing either love poems, sad poems and poems on life!.
I've read on poetry!.com that those kind of poems are the popular ones these days!.Www@QuestionHome@Com