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Question: Poem i wrote, not very good though!?
my heart is out of tune
my mind has no idea
i cant control my actions
but my heart beats just for you

i cough up blood
i forget the whole world
i need to be set free
but it still beats for you

tears dribble down
i stumble away
memories sink in
my heart is racing for you

midnight grows nearer
dreams become vivid
my mind is already set
its broken just for you

the clock chimes
my dream comes true
the battles finally over
my heart stops just for you

not very good, but im posting it anyways!. i wrote it a few days ago at like 3am!. any comments or suggestions are welcomeWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think it's pretty interesting!. Why do you say that it's not good!? You're much better than I am!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a very beautiful poem!. It's very creatively imaginable!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. A little punctuation would look nicer, though!. (commas, semicolons)Www@QuestionHome@Com