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Question: Poem I wrote!.!.!.DO YOU LIKE IT!?!? 10 Points to best answer!?
Just Maybe…

His name…everyone knew…yet no one said!.

His face…everyone looked at…yet no one saw!.

His mind…everyone thought they understood…!.yet no one comprehended!.

His eyes…everyone glanced in…!.yet no one stared in!.

His hands…everyone held…yet no one kept!.

His tears…everyone saw…yet no one wiped away!.

His scars…everyone gazed upon with awe…yet no one stopped to question!.

His smile…everyone loved…!.yet no one ever saw!.

His touch…everyone yearned for…yet no one ever asked for!.

His love…everyone thought they had…yet no one ever gave it back!.

His friends…everyone thought he had…yet were just there for the illusion!.

His heart…everyone thought he carried on his sleeves…!.yet truly he locked it away and lost the key!.

His dreams…everyone wanted him to achieve…yet no one offered to help, but only to cheat!.

His family…everyone looked upon as great…were just there to serve some food on a plate!.

His feet…everyone thought would carry him towards the future…yet they refused to go on towards anything!.

His soul… everyone thought was on its way to heaven!.!.!.yet was damned by his own two hands!.

His goals…everyone thought he didn’t have…yet were the things that controlled everything!.

His skin…everyone watched with jealousy and glares…yet he truly only wanted it to be scarred to show them how he truly felt!.

His wrists…everyone didn’t bother to notice…yet those that did, didn’t bother to show it!.

His death…everyone cried with tears…yet were they the tears of sadness or those of joys!?

Look for the boy with the broken smile, and maybe then he'll stay awhile…Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i think it is a pretty good poem, like the concept and everything!. but, some of the lines can get repetitive and i think u should shorten it!.

Ex!. his face!.!.!.!.no one saw!.
his smile!.!.!.!.no one ever saw!.!.!.!.
and heart and love part!.

and some of the other ones u can take out to shorten it and it would still be good!. like choose which u think r best or what u want to express in ur poem!. other than that i think its great :P keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com

What is the point of our real opinion!? People are just saying it is good for the best answer!. I didn't read it but I hope it is actually good!.
Good luck!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very interesting, but be sure not to over use some words, and make sure that you use great details!.!.!.!.!.but overall it was WONDERFULWww@QuestionHome@Com

kinda sad but a moving and toughing story, awesome, really!Www@QuestionHome@Com

A very moving poem!.
I sense your sorrow and loss!.
I hope writing this helped you to heal!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that is a very nice poem
good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow this is really good! nice jobWww@QuestionHome@Com


that was deep i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com