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Question: Is this a good poem!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?
Ice Bird

When I am on the ice I am like a bird!.
The rink is the field I soar over!.
My ice skates allow me to skate,
As a bird's wings allows it to fly!.
The Sun smiles down at the dove
So that everyone on land will see
The Beauty of the bird!.
The spotlight shines on me,
And all the people look at me
As I fly across the ice!.
Bold and proud, the dove shows off
It's brilliant white feathers!.
Beautifully and elegantly,I show off
My dark hair and pail dress!.
Dancing across the rink
I put together my act;
As a bird hops around gathering straw
To put together his nest!.
I am as graceful as a bird:
A bird of the ice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
BEAUTIFUL! I love it :]

i would just change this line to:
"My ice skates allow me to GLIDE",

and the other to "And everyone is watching me" or something similar

but it's really amazing! well done xxWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is really good, it inspired me actually!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is really good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats a good poem
i LOVE ITWww@QuestionHome@Com

Dabg thats awesome!!! Great job!! **high five!!** :DWww@QuestionHome@Com