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Position:Home>Poetry> Will you rate my poem? *again*?Question: Will you rate my poem!? *again*!? I stood i wept, i gazed at you
your eyes were cold, an icy blue just the girl i thought i knew another life gone, your days were few your lips were a deep and darkened shade of purple and in your hands there laid the weapon for a which a life was paid one single solemn razor blade gone forever, now it seems like somehow you were meant to be taken away and your life seized one more death, and a soul to please =/ yeah!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I like the beginning of it!. The other part sounds too angsty!. The structure does seem somewhat forced!. You should do free verse!. It would most likely be better that way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com r u serious!!? this is awesome! Not only was there a lot of feeling in there, rully, but you made some cute rhyming!. I could actually envision this scene from a movie :{ wow! =] I give it a 5/5!. n screw u up there u ******* duuuUF this is not gay, this is artWww@QuestionHome@Com umm!.!.!.vocabulary!? that would help = ] i think your story/point/meaning of the poem gets lost in the lack of beat or rhythm a lil' bit!. yeah, working on those two things would bring your poetry to a whole new levelWww@QuestionHome@Com I really liked it!. It shows emotions!. Maybe you can clean it up a bit!. Capitalization and grammar!.Www@QuestionHome@Com You tried too hard and forced your rhymes!. The structure is predictable and it's not very good sorry dude!. It reads way too cliche, and it sounds like too many other teen angst poems!. 1/10Www@QuestionHome@Com I'm afraid this is officially the gayest poem I have ever read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It's amazing!. A little emo!.!.!. But the writing is very good!. I say!.!.!.4 *sWww@QuestionHome@Com Yo, for real, this is a hot poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh my god, that is about the deepest poem I've ever read!. Nice flow, and great ending!. I love itttt! Why does everyone hate it!? I lovelovelove it! Ypu don't have to be legit emo to write dark poems!.!.!. these people need to get lives, lmao!. (:Www@QuestionHome@Com put it to some dark emotional music with a good beat and ive give it 3!.5/5 :)Www@QuestionHome@Com i love this one!Www@QuestionHome@Com |