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Question: My Very Own Poem!.!.!.Do You Like It!? !?
Someone who I used to call dad,
someone who I could learn by,
someone who I could call when I'm mad!.!.!.
dad!.

From an early age,
to now and these days,
not any more!.!.!.
dad!.

Twelve going on thirteen,
healthy going on sick,
happy going on sad!.!.!.
dad!.

We used to laugh and play,
now it's boring everyday,
he has left me with this pain!.!.!.
dad!.

God gave me a mom,
god gave me a step dad,
but god didn't remember to give me a!.!.!.
dad!.

So i'll remember when you come back,
if you come back,
will you come back!.!.!.
dad!.

That you were never there,
you never cared,
never showed me tender love and care!.!.!.
dad!.



Not the best poem ever but I hope you guys like it, positive feedback please!.
I wanna become a writer or journalist! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it, it gets the job done without any fireworks!.

Very simple poem in words, but complex in thought!.

Keep it up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i love it!!

it's really deep!.!.!.but the language i so simple!.!.!.which displays the innocence of the person in the poem!.

it makes it all more believable!.!.!.

and i love the style, the rhythm, the beat!.!.!.it works soo well!.

can you please help me out!?

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thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it, it shows what you are feeling, your being honest and that's what poems need to be based on experiences and honestly :)

good job keep it up :) always have faith in yourself, never stop tryingWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love it, it is very moving and shows some of what you were feeling, as a writer myself I appreciate it when someone writes something that is well written!. Keep up the good work and you will reach your goals!.

If you like writing poems there are many places to put your stuff out there, you can look on the web or you can go to your local book store and check out the magi zine section!. They have magi zines for every type of writing and you can submit your poem and they pick through the ones they receive, you can also enter contests where you would win money and scholarships!. Check some of those out and see what you think!. If you become published you can put that on a resume and it looks really good to a employer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com