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Question: I wrote this poem!. Good!? Bad!?
HARSH WINTER WINDS
Harsh winter winds blow in the Kansas City streets
I've got my winter coat on and a hat made of fleece
This season has been extremely cold for many many weeks
But I still like to go out and make snowprints with my feet
Winter snow falls from time to time
It's soft, cold, and like sand it's fine
An amazing landscape to those who appreciate the sight
Snow gives the ground a reflecting light at night
The harsh winter winds hit my face with a bite
I look up and see the birds in their long winter flight
Around me everything seems still
No sign of life in the bitter chill
But I know that nature has that strong survival will
Nature will be back in more abundance soon
Over the horizon the summer season looms
But for now I'm going back to my room
To wait for tomorrow nights full beautiful moon!.
(tell me how it is, and be honest!. you're not gonna hurt my feelings)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well unlike one of my predecessor here I will keep it simple so you won't need a dictionary !. It is a very good poem it reminds me of New England naturalist verse !.
First you don't have to stretch yourself to make the lines rhyme !. Other wise you get what you have in line there stanza three !. It does not work with what you are putting together in that stanza !.
Take the time and read some Robert Frost !. You will get an better understanding of what some of us are saying!. Other than that I really enjoyed your effort !. I have an personal affinity to naturalist poetry !. Keep it working your on the right track !.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Bad in my opinion but I am not that much into environment in poems!. Poems should be nice and short but you make them long!. Shorten them up in the near future!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
work on your rhyme scheme!. There is ambiguity when you employ trochaic verse then immediately go into iambic the next line!.
Imagery could be stronger!.
Take out the cliches
Great JobWww@QuestionHome@Com
it is ok
you could have used more emotive languageWww@QuestionHome@Com