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If I Say Lovely Things About
Your Hair Can We Make Love
And Then May I go Fishing !?
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If I compared your hair to Rainbow trout,
Intend un-brined that shine in River Snake,
Could lust between us jump above our doubt,
To unconditioned love for heaven’s sake!?

A Summer’s streak of shadows I recall,
Beneath light strokes, an artist’s repertoire,
Radiant hues of highlights dancing all,
The tangled nuanced mesh I stare in awe!.

What wildly wistful playful snips so bold,
In heaps they leap to sky once freed from net,
Then cascade softly to my captured hold,
And thereby fixed a doo held firmly set!.

Bereft of scales your head, I see, my wish,
Now after love, my Love, may I go fish !?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow, a sonnet! Very cool!!!

I loved the title, the rhymes and the iambic pentameter!. You have such a knack for using whimsy in your writing, and you never let it devolved into schmaltz!.

There are a couple of things I don't understand yet: Is "River Snake" the Snake River in ID!? "Bereft of scales your head, I see, my wish": I can almost glom a little meaning from that, but not quite!.

Maybe that means I haven't thought about it enough!.!.!.

Hooray for writing a poem that uses the word "doo" to mean coiffure!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I read your title and giggled, had to go answer the phone which gave me time to stop giggling so I could read this little poem!.

How sweet you are to compare her hair to Rainbow trout! She should see what that really is, true sentiment for sure and give you what you require, including the fishing trip!!!!!!!

When I started seeing "romance" through my hubby's minds eye, it made me see how much he thinks of me!

Nice write this!

And I didn't giggle again until the end---gigglesWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very well written, loved it!.!.!.
I stumbed over word choice of "unconditioned"!.!.!.!.my brain read it as "unconditional" thinking that's what it should have said!.

But, I adore you always!.
maWww@QuestionHome@Com

And the bumper sticker "I'd rather be fishing" is stuck on your headboard, no doubt!

Any woman not wooed I cannot understand; then again, I cannot understand any women, so!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A true Artist, a genuine Poet can be inspired even from an octopus or sea weeds!.!.!.!. I am almost having in my mouth the taste of fried fish!
What other criterion can be stronger than that!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thy Sonnets do create hilarity
of fishy love thou art so erudite
ribs ache from laughter, guffaws, all of we
shalt must needs toast thy pen eternally!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm bereft of scales thanks to a good dandruff shampoo!. haha

This is soooo good! I love it!. You amaze me!. Your mind is a wonderful playground!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com

Unconditioned love as in unconditioned hair!? Wild!.
A clever poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

you can come fishing with me!.!.!. leave the chick at home!

<<<<<<<< not safe to be alone with on a boat!.!.!. *hides garden fork behind back*Www@QuestionHome@Com

You sonnet writin' ************!
Brilliant!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'd let you run barefoot through my hair !.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.!.Go fishing
You bring me home that rainbow trout and fry it up and feed me

THEN we will *talk* about loveWww@QuestionHome@Com

turn on
the hair conditioner
please

enjoyedWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is a beautiful poem, very interesting, I love it!. Hope you have more poems to show us!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I Like your Love poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

Ah!.!.!.the ol' bate and tackle ployWww@QuestionHome@Com

Humm!. Be sure your lover likes fish!. I wouldn't like being compared to one, myself!. lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

Exquisit! !.!.!.!.!. caught a fish!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Fish oil for the hair!? lol, jk!. It's good ; )Www@QuestionHome@Com

love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I sea you wrote this for the halibut!. Nice one, you took my hook, line and sinkerWww@QuestionHome@Com

your "L" poems!.!.!.!.!.

!.!.!.!.!.are like sunday sunshine!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ah!.!.!.!.!.!.!.a man after my own heart!. Let's go fishing!!

nfd?Www@QuestionHome@Com