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I wrote a villanelle (well, half a villanelle, I made it a little shorter than they usually are because I was running out of steam!) for my boyfriend for our anniversary!. I know it's really sappy and silly, but I think he'll get a kick out of it!. So if you could give me some kind of constructive criticism, I'd really be grateful!. I always write in formal schemes, but this is my first time trying my hand at a villanelle!. also, I don't have a title yet - any suggestions!?

Thanks in advance! =]

High above, the stars are bright,
diamonds in the velvet skies;
Two hearts, entwined – it feels so right!.

You hold my hand beneath the night,
and I look into your eyes;
high above, the stars are bright!.

You have all my love tonight,
and always, for it never dies!.
Two hearts, entwined – it feels so right!.

To be with you is pure delight!.
The winter wind sweetly sighs,
and high above, the stars are bright;
Two hearts, entwined – it feels so right!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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