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Question: A reposting of One Man's Dream, comments!?
Since I had to create a whole new account, I figured my first question would be about a poem I wrote a day ago!. I thought I lost it, but after doing a search, found it still listed, so here she goes again:
In Memory of Martin Luther King, Jr
he had a dream many years ago
he had a vision that every boy and girl
no matter their color, race or creed
would one day live in harmony
now the time has come
a new president is here
nothing like the others
he's different
he's of another breed
young and passionate
brave and strong
his heritage
his heart
something to behold
is this the answer
to one man's dream
Is Obama the incarnation
Of Martin's wonderful prediction
Danielle N Calhoun
(c) January 19, 2008Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I tried to answer this yesterday but Yapoo kept saying it was busy! Is Obama the incarnation!? To me, no, and yes I did vote for him!. He is his own man: smart, gifted and a superb speaker that happens to be very charismatic!. He does indeed have the opportunity to change the mood of America but he will be tested!. Probably his greatest asset will be his oratory skills!. Your poem does well on touching on the dreams of another great leader!. Critiques would be that even if you are not using punctuation you should still capitalize President!. I also did not like the word choice: breed!. And I am mixed on the title you chose, as this seems to be more about hope for the future!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
He has a big dream to live up to! But I do believe that He is the Man to do it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Thank you so much! Great, I believe a change is coming!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com