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Question: I edited this Luc Bat a bit, I attempted to wrap around!.!.will you read this poem, and comment Constructively !?
An olive branch, I wave at you
attempting face to save!.
A simple act, I gave it style
Accompanied with smile;
I asked, “please sit a while, with me,”
before you turn and flee!.
Within this century we live
My loyalties I give!.
Your haughty look sends shivers, though
as right past me, you blow!.
I said “please, do not go off mad;
Just sit with me a tad…!.
Thinking, ‘we never had dinner,
I’m becoming thinner,
by the moment, please sir… if you
would look, you’d see it’s trueWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
you've followed the form!. The content is a delight!. I can't see anything to add to make it better!.
Brilliant, reallyWww@QuestionHome@Com
Dear Minstrel,
I find this form (not your poem) hard to understand, and am researching it and read your poem again, and make suggestions if warranted!. Meanwhile, I leave you one from the page where I am trying to learn it!.
A Luc Bat Poem
A luc bat poem is such
You need not say so much at all
Simple words can enthrall
It can be simple and small or big
An epic thingamajig
Alter words make them fig or fit
The poetic license bit
Just like that line of **** or ****
Whatever, give it a bash
Now my mind I must thrash and beat
And turn these humble feet
So first and last line meet and touch -- The Biki
I find this form hard to understand!. Yet I am researching it and read your poem again, and make suggestions if warranted!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
My only comment is that it is a wonderful write! I wouldn't change a thing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
how can i critique anything that starts with waving a olive branch!.!.!.peace!.!.!.great poemWww@QuestionHome@Com
yes!.!.!.!.!.!. it's true!.!.!.!.
!.!.!.!.i see it in your piece!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com