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Question: Attempt # 2 of Partenza Represa a revision!.!.!.!.Some Time in the Live Of!.!.!.!.!?
Carnage everywhere, heart exposed!.
Heart exposed, black and blue body!.
Black and blue body, pain raked soul!.
Pain raked soul, crawl on hands and knees!.

Make up artistry, long sleeve blouse,
Long sleeve blouse, skirt hitting the floor;
Skirt hitting the floor, hides bruising!.
Hides bruising, not turmoil inside!.

Smile on face, no one will find out!.
No one will find out, bloodless crime!.
Bloodless crime, but crime just the same!.
But crimes just the same, police!.!.!.!.Phftt!

Home from work, my God I am late!
My God I am late, wrath begins!.
Wrath begins, more slapping around!.
More slapping around, head hits brick!.

No feeling in head, blood runs down!.
Blood runs down, gash three inches long!.
Gash three inches long, no police;
No police, neighbors hide inside!.

Landlord wants money, time to run!.
Time to run, pack in a hurry!.
Pack in a hurry, blood seeps out!.
Blood seeps out, Northward bound for home!.

From all the 'hard knocks', lessons learned!.
Lessons learned, wounds turn into scars!.
Wounds turn into scars, deep within;
Deep within, they stay through the years!.

Sandy revised 1/20/09

What do you think!? Have at it and let me know please!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It has grown a good bit since last time!. I'm impressed!. Are you going to try to dum da dum dum dummmm, as Green suggested!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are giggling right along my girl!.
I am not a critic, but you know that already, eh!?
I just like to read and if I like it I say so!.!.
I will leave that Iambic pent up meter for green, syd, and the rest to pester you with!. I only come for the words!.!.

Nice read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

How can a person giggle and use so many words at the same time!?

Now, we'll learn ya' iambic whatsameter!.!.!.

da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM!.

The lines must go like so (Comme ?a)!.

"i BANG a DRUM with STICKS and MARCH a-LONG"

oui!?Www@QuestionHome@Com