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Question: Just a short poem i wrote, please tell me what u think!?
Darkness comes like a wet blanket
suffocating and heavy
moonlight glows on the wall
its silver light a ghostly visage

I cant sleep
I cant sleep
my stomach churns
yet i feel no hunger

Events of the day play out
like an silent movie
broken at intervals
by a new scene

i cant sleep
I cant sleep
I perspire
yet i feel no warmth

The black dog barks
its ecco resonating in the gallery
I drift around the room
yet i cant see

I cant sleep
I cant sleep
I toss and and turn
and feel no comfort

Hands of the clock teasing
mocking my plight
pointing accusing hands
the watchfull judge

I cant sleep
I cant sleep
only the shadows
can hear me screamingWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I enjoyed your poem and able to relate and feel everything you said!. I liked the last line!.
PS - get some Ambiem haWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. Its ironic, the playful lines (hands of the clock teasing) but the darkness overall!. Interesting to read, I also thought the last line was very clever!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com