Comments on a poem about taste in poems?

Question: Comments on a poem about taste in poems!?

It's not all lovely
this stuff of life
some's downright
ugly and mean!.
I tire of words taking me
down primrose path
asking,
see the pretty butterflies
alight!?

Give me the sting
of the bee!

Leave toxic poison
underneath my skin
let it raise up and
fester in red,
irritating the hell out of me!.
I'll dig at its itch
till own blood is drawn,
at least it was something
I felt!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Getting tired of sugar coated lullabies!? lol A poem should move one, give one reason to pause, give one reason to think, give one a whack along side the head at times!. I don't think that is asking too much! Let that wound bleed awhile before you put the band-aid on!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorrow and joy walk hand in hand can't have one without the other!.

As there is bad and good in everything and everybody, from one degree
or another!.

Your poem, there are moments as you describe, that is for sure, If one
can't change it, best to let it flow in and out, injury to self won't change it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No Ma when we get hurt you cant see physically on our bodies what it has done to us!. We had rather have something we can see outside to blame!.But only we have the ugly part in our body to mend !.!.Thats the hardest part to mend !.!. Take away the ugly in our souls !. Thanks Ma that made me think within myself!. Star 4 u!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

sound like you are having a bad day - however everything you put down is true - to the point and fully expresses your intent!.

i understood everything there and felt it myself!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have a doozie for you once this yahoo answers starts to work again, it aint pretty I assure you

Nice poem BTW, its different and I like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like this very much!. And I so hear what your saying!. It's there Ma!.!.!.just below the surface!.!.!.waiting for me to let go and let it out!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Mars wants poems with good taste, not poems that taste good!. This one is in good taste!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

People on yahoo don't see that sting a bless!. Ain't that strange!?
at least it was something
I felt!.
You're one hell of a poet!
Enjoyed your sweet offer!

Edit : Sir Lano, the lady chose "bee sting"!. A perfect word choice for obvious reasons!. If she chose scorpion-sting, I'd be the first to critic her bad word-choice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love this, really I do!.
a highlight of my day :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not a fan of the primrose path either !.!.!. that's not life (not for most anyway)
Good words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!. I was going to email you tonight about this very topic!.

I love this!. Great work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Give me the sting
of the bee!"

That line says it all, Ma!Www@QuestionHome@Com

No heaven, no hell!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Life has many flavours
It is our duty
to record them all

Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice! As always Ma?

xoxo
?Www@QuestionHome@Com

hey Ma
ya gotta taste the bitter
so the sweet will seem sweeter

thanks!.!.!.!.
enjoyedWww@QuestionHome@Com

Poetry is beyond me MA!.!.!.Its all over my old head!.!.sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.do u really want me to write a poem about my itchy armpits and slipping on my stairs!? The way I bent my foot and it hurts and the welts I raise scratching my shoulder!?
I could but really I do not want to!.

edit
I do have one here some where called Migraine will that be ok!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'll post one I have been working on for days, just can't finish it yet--can't get a grip on the closer!.

Maybe I will close with blood guts and gore just for you!.

Nice write, Ma--I feel this way sometimes to!. Give me reality not sunshine and roses!Www@QuestionHome@Com

But when I "sting" you, you complain and say "Bee off with you!"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com