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Question: Will you please read and comment about my poem!?
This is a limerick poem that I wrote a little while ago!. Hope you like it : )

The Boy And His Pork: A Limerick Tale

There once was a boy from York,
Infatuated with pork,
Wherever he went,
His money he spent,
Just to gobble it down with a fork!.

One day his father said stop!.
“My boy you’re going to pop!.”
His hoggish eyes gleamed,
As his temper steamed,
Then took he a barbecue plop!.

“My boy you eat like a sow,
I can’t even figure out how!.
Whenever we dine,
You scarf like a swine,
I implore you to stop it right now!.”

The boy then let out a snort,
An oink! I’d swear it in court!.
His nose then did change,
It wrinkled up strange;
He sprouted a tail of some sort!

Right there in front of my eyes,
To such amazing surprise,
He morphed to a pig,
And grew rather big,
To say he stopped eating is lies!.

You may guess how this tale then goes,
Because no one else really knows,
Though in lands far away,
You may hear them say,
Man is what he eats, and reaps what he sows!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like the message at them end "Man is what he eats, and reaps what he sows!."Www@QuestionHome@Com

The Rhyming makes it sound like your trying too hard!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

lmao this is so funny! I love limmericks I write them myself!.

My only suggestion is in the third stanza you might want to change "my boy you eat like a sow" to "my boy you eat like a cow"!.

also, I think there is a spelling error in the fourth stanza "To stay he stopped eating is lies", that should be "his lies", right!?

Keep up the good writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com