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Question: What do you think of these two poems!?
Ok well just last night I wrote two poems that I am gonna print out and frame because I am free from a deep secret and these two poems are how I feel now it's better then how I use to feel!.


I'm set free!

I'm set free
Set free from
A deep secret
That ate at me
For so many
years!.

For a long time
I was locked up
In this little box
That's been keeping
Me inside and not
letting me go!. Well
Now I'm set free!.

I'm free from the
Danger, pain and
Memories of what
Happened!. I'm set
Free from keeping
the secret hidden!.

You set me free
From it all!. I'm set
Free because of you!.
I wouldn't of had the
Strength if it wasn't
For you setting me free!.

I'm set free! Set
Free from a deep
Secret that ate at me
For so many years!.

Thank you:
Thank you for
Everything!. I
Don't know where
I would be without you!.

Thank you for never
giving up on me!. You
Really are the one!. I love
you so much!.

You showed me
Who I really am
Inside!. You made
Me stronger!. Thank
you for being my
Knight in shining armor!.
Thank you for making me
Who I am at this very moment!.

I've gone from Depressed,
Alone, and scared to happy,
Hyper, and more outgoing!.
Thank you for everything!.
I would of never had the
Strong to spell that secret!.
THANK YOU I love you!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You were molested, and found someone that would listen to you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's all okay,but i didn't like the last verse,and the line that went like : ate at me
it was a good try, but you could've dun better like the person above has saidWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's a little to rigid or something, you're not truly expressing your emotions in the poem to the fullest extent you could be!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

In all honesty that poem is just not great at all!. Way too personal the ur audience cant connect with what u are saying!. I am glad it helped u feel better about the burden that u were felling!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It feels incomplete!.!.!. All i can say is that you should add more detail into why you feel that way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think that it is a really good poem, if possible what exactly is it about!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow that was great!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com