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Question: I need help with a b-day poem for my mom please!?
Okay!. So here it is!. I need to find out how and where to put it the "Hapy b-day" part and how I can make it rhyme!. also, could you tell me if it's good so far please!? Thanks!.

Lisa Hays !.!.!. her name is great,
As a mom, number one, she does great!.
Her method is gentle,
Her disposition kind,
She has kindness to the others always on her mind!.

When she's not cooking in the kitchen,
And food isn't flying,
A shuttle ship is always up in the air for vying!.
She plays that stuff well,
She tells all who inquire,
Not ashamed of her talents is something in her admired!.

Since her temper seems to be always in check,
She will always earn great attention and respect!.
She has never yelled,
Though at times I've been scolded!.
How she manages sometimes!.!.!.I don't know if I could "hold it!"

She always makes explanations clear,
Gee, why has she not made Mother of the Year!?
The few occasions when things were uncertain,
To my rescue she would come!.!.!.
I was never left hurtin!.'

Just an ordinary mother underscores Lisa for sure,
She is MUCH MORE,
A few words more only the reader must endure!.
She's polite to everyone,
Her caring manner always shows!.!.!.
My mother, Lisa Hays is someone EVERYONE should know!.

Well, whadda ya think!? And how and where do I fit in happy b-day with it still being able to rhyme!? Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
here's what i got ( hope you like it), you could put this at the end!. the picture should be you and her to remind her how special she is to you

happy birthday mom your always the best
i would want nothing more not even less
if i have another life what can i say
but to have my mother always be Lisa HaysWww@QuestionHome@Com

instead of using "she" replace it with "you!." write it as if you are writing to her instead of describing her!. it will make it more sincere and personal!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its actually pretty good!. There are some words in their that may not be words at all but im not sure!. Maybe you should just leave it as it is and not put the happy birthday part in and just say it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its awesome,


well you could add at the end

But for now ill send my blessings to the mom who makes me proud!. Happy Birthday ill say from present to future, to the one who gave me birth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's a lovely poem for your mom!

No more rhyming is necessary, "Happy Birthday Mom, I love you" will suffice!.

Great job, sweetie!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

after last line put something like this!.!.!.
so on this day,tell her happy birthday,and watch her make a wish on the candles she will blow!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ahahaWww@QuestionHome@Com

i dont know about the happy birthday, but that is awesome i think shell love it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

you cant rhyme great with great!.
but i think she will like it because shes your momWww@QuestionHome@Com

Talk to her personally and put "you" instead of her, her name, or she!. For the poem, it's very cute and I think she'll love it! Those are the things moms go crazy for! Her card should be cute with a drawing you made and maybe cool ribbons and stuff!. ou can go to like craft stores and stuff and look at the supplies they have for scrapbooking!. That's what I do and they always come out soooo cute! Good Luck! And Happy Birthday to your mom!Www@QuestionHome@Com