An Acrostic Jamaica, what do you think?

Question: An Acrostic Jamaica, what do you think!?

JAMAICA
By S!.F!. Reborn

Jah love!
A mild breeze covers my flesh
Moving in time with the reggae
A steel drum!.!.!. a steel pulse
I and I find riddum!.!.!.!.pure fire
Come blaze me now
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Grab my suitcase and
Ready the plane my American
Express is getting ol'
Alobar
To Jamaica Man! To Jamaica!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Quality-wise yours is a great example of minimalist "descriptive poetry"!.

You could "expand" yours!.!.!. Cool Lya !?

I keep this one in my files for reference!.

The Deserted Village
by Oliver Goldsmith

(lines 10-14)

The sheltered cot, the cultivated farm;
The never-failing brook, the busy mill,
The decent church that topped the neighboring hill:
The hawthorn-bush, with seats beneath the shade
For talking age and whispering lovers made!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

lol I feel the Jamaican in me rising!.!.!.hehe as always you are beautifully talented when it comes to the matter of words!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it! Love steel drums!

Never been there so I will not attempt to talk like that--I have friends who were born and raised there and they would shoot me for saying something wrong!--giggles!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cool!! :)

Happy weekend, Semper!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Jammin ,,,We be Jammin,,Jammin Mon!!,,,We got da pardee flavors Mon!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

"No problem!"
At least, when I was there, that's what I heard the most!

But your wonderful verse sure took me there again to see and feel it!
Thanks!.

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Very interesting word usage here!. And I could hear the rhythm, Nice!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

not big on the reggae thing but it is good poem!.!.missed your poems the last couple of daysWww@QuestionHome@Com

You make me want to be there!.!.
Jamaica is calling my name!.!.!.!.
I am listening!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is beautiful!.

i can see it all as clear as if i was there!.

you have a gift!.
keep writing!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Never been, only seen, heard and read!.
love the steel drumWww@QuestionHome@Com

You give me riddum and make me wanna dance man!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yo ha fiyah in da blurd Mon! No poet, no lie!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

put it to musicWww@QuestionHome@Com