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Question: Would You Like To Critic My POEM!!!!?
Hey Everyone!. I wrote this poem a little bit ago!. Tell me what you think please!
"My Perfect Friend"
I’ve found this perfect friend
Who looks and sounds like me!.
She always seems to understand
Who I’m trying to be!.
She listens to me closely
And never turns away!.
She’s always where I need her!.
She’s always there to stay!.
When I cry and need a hand!.
I try to move a little nearer,
But when I reach to have her touch
I realize she’s only my mirror!.
Thanks for the thoughts! Have a good day!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Not bad at all!. You did well with the neat ending!.
The body of the poem was not exciting (a bit trite)
but then it made the ending even better!.
Good job!.
I suggest you keep a Thesaurus handy and attempt
to find other words at times!.
Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Try to ease away from using the word "she" too often!. Is there a specific audience you are trying to appeal to!? If you want a broad audience, by the usage of "she" so much you are already negating males that might be reading the poem!.
You might want to reconfigure this last stanza, "But when I reach to have her touch
I realize she’s only my mirror!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
nice! what do you think of mine!?Www@QuestionHome@Com