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Question: Want to Critic my POEM!!!!!?
Hey! I wrote this poem about my life at this time!. Can you read it and tell me what you think please!?

"Me Sea Harbor"

Sitting on the edge on my dock!.
Looking out on Me Sea Harbor!.
So many secrets and feelings
Are kept here locked away!.

Big ships, little ships,
Row boats and yachts,
Cruise liners, sail boats,
Motor boats, and rafts!.

On that liner over there,
Full of luxury and new feelings,
But I’m too afraid to aboard!.
So I sit here only to wonder!.

The row boat that passed by
Is small but holds worthy
In it- my values and morals
I shall never torch my row boat!.

But that ship across the water
I’ve thought about torching!.
Its sailed years but slowly sinking,
I don’t want to repair it; not now!.


Running day and night,
Is my yacht over there!.
Full over unlimited love and care
Never will my family yacht fail!.

The sail boat on the horizon
Brought me hope and happiness
My new sail boat is brilliant!.
Forever I’ll treasure my sail boat!.

My get away raft just crawled by
Only I can aboard the small escape!.
To feel the touch of the ivory keys,
To only hear the musical sounds!.

In this bay; holding ships of all sizes!.
Where secrets, feelings and fears are kept!.
Until torched or said to sail away!.
Forever locked in Me Sea Harbor!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really liked the first stanzas 1 and 2, i didnt much care for 3 4 and 5!.!.!.!.i could do away with them, then i really liked the Sixth stanzas till the last stanza!.!.!.so for the most part i liked it!.!.!.it was very playful and childish!.!.!.really i liked it even though 3 4 and 5 were not so great, but still very jubilant!.Www@QuestionHome@Com