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Question: Struggling still it seems,,, care to comment !?
I have met, and kept, dear friends in this life of mine,
yet, incredibly, just one special presence is always there!.
Participating many times over the years, as only we could,
pain, sorrow, laughter, fear, adventures, a few tears!.

Swimming in the ocean, we went once or twice,
lazily day dreaming on the beach, a few times or more!.
Climbing hazy, blue green mountain trails, to peaks high,
watching the sun set glow, then waiting for it to rise!.

We marveled at nature’s beauty fully captured for us,
tree edged wheat fields, comets flight, winter’s twilight sky!.
Lightening flew, tragedy struck, hitting too close to home,
the wonder of it all, is we were spared, others were not!.

Once under full moon, slow passionate love experienced,
so bound, inseparable we were, as two became one together!.
Being so close, one to the other, no possible way of avoiding,
talking turned to hearts of dreams, wishes, prays, and hope!.

We wiled sleepless nights away, under soft lamp glowing,
as many folks are apt to do, though none so close as we two!.
Recollecting airy, spring like joys of our long past youth,
though wintry blues and ailments, thankfully faded with age!.

Things in our time, we have witnessed, just you and me,
sometimes you fade out, then again, sometimes I wane!.
Connecting quite frequently in each others presence,
surprisingly, we have no more than merely touched!.

We did some wild things a few times, just you and me,
though we have never really, formally, been introduced!.
I’m me, you are you, joined til death we part it seems,
swinging along through life,,, come what may!.

my shadow and me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
kerching! Right on the money!.!.!.!.!.held til the last!.!.!.!.mastery in tale spinning and picture painting!.!.!.I love the "Butter/slam" method as I like to call it!.!.!.Reel em in and once you think you have landed em, let em off the hook!.
Talent!

Edit: one small change V4 L 4 "prayers"!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ah HA! Ya GOT me on that one! I was trying to figure out how slow passionate love you experienced and then you said no more than merely touched!.!.!.kept working on that unsuccessfully until your very last line! Good one there, my friend!

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Wonderful poem! I loved the imagery and the twist at the end! I didn't see it coming!. I really liked S5!. Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Oh you! :-)) Very nice twist there, kept me wondering up till the last!! Brava!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ah your shadow is sort of like my imagination to me!.!.
I enjoyed!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This should have a title "Just you and Me"

A dream fantasy, held me to the end!. I especially liked the setting sun, but also not forgetting the rising sun (which has such beauty and like a new beginning!.) I have had similar thoughts in my life time and I am especially a lover of the Moon, as iI imagine those that have passed on are looking down at me!.

Thanks!. I know others care too!.!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com